同样的曲,中英两种词...大家来听下Demo给下意见好吗?

1v4n

很久没有把作品放上来了...希望得到你们的支持与意见...
谢谢~~

试听:http://www.esnips.com/doc/cfa546 ... 0%E5%A5%8B%E6%96%97

为你奋斗
词曲:1v4n

Verse 1
时间在走 过往的路无法挽留
松开了我的指头
眼泪在流 仿佛在世界的尽头
爱太多总要放手

Pre-Chorus
你看不透 我的灵魂为你奋斗 (我再说不出口 我已经在发抖)
不能承受 你我之间没有结果 (我再说不出口 我已经在发抖)

Chorus
让我自由失败变成理由 为你我愿意守候
爱你不够只是你的借口 混乱节奏
如果你还觉得不够 我愿意给你我所有
当我不再连接你的眼眸 一切都让我难受

Verse 2
该不会是我比他还更丑
看见你的左右 有他陪伴和你走走
眼泪在流 仿佛在世界的尽头
爱太多总要放手

Repeat Pre-Chorus

Bridge
你曾说 我缺乏温柔
后悔当初不珍惜你爱我的时候
为了你 幸福的理由
把我当作牺牲然后一切爱都给没收

Repeat Chorus

试听:http://www.esnips.com/doc/02b72d ... t-Let-You-Disappear

Can’t let you disappear
词曲:1v4n

Verse 1
Time is running, drag me away from you my dear
Loosing my every finger
Can’t hold my tears living in the world without you
Frustrated on my peaceful

Pre-Chorus
Keep the distance far away affected my fear
(Can’t even let me breath, can’t even let me break)
From day to day, missed the moment we had before
(Can’t even let me breath, can’t even let me break)

Chorus
Sorry I just can’t let you disappear because I miss you babe
Now once again I wish to see your face but it’s faded
I’d thought that we could stay longer
But that’s an illusion I’ve got
Feeling my heart beating fast just for you
Falling from heaven to you

Verse2
Don’t you feel like as what I have felt now?
Listen to my rock song clearing my message right away
Can’t hold my tears living in the world without you
Frustrated on my peaceful

Repeat Pre-Chorus

I miss you, like I ever do
Looking to the path where you go I wish to follow
Please don’t go, like I hope is true
Forgive my foolishness babe why do you can be so cruel

Repeat Chorus

wyj

你的声音好温柔
帮你顶下

1v4n

哈哈...
怎么说温柔呢?
反而我觉得我的声音的特色是"难听"